Oh help
For anyone who wanted to know how I did in my first assignment:
Coverage: B
Analysis: C
Presentation: B
Comments:
This was a very interesting paper. You gave a strong argument with a real sense of your own position in relation to the argument. You write stylishly and articulately, and explain your ideas well. You also gave a solid sense of a self-reflective position with regards to your understanding of yourself as an emergent artist with a specific agenda. Structurally the body of the essay was good, your argument flowed coherently and logically. Where you fell down considerably is in your failure to develop appropriate introduction and conclusion and your failure to use citations to back up, extent and further develop your own argument. Your introduction needs to map out the entire essay and not just the opening section as you do, and your conclusion needs to stand as a statement for your position in the argument itself, rather than as a sad add on at the end. This is such a shame as the main body of the text was excellent.
Bibliography is well laid out (such a shame you didn't use it).
Overall grade: 62%
I think maybe i should go crawl somewhere and die :(
As an extra note, one of her sentences didnt quite make sense... heh.
Coverage: B
Analysis: C
Presentation: B
Comments:
This was a very interesting paper. You gave a strong argument with a real sense of your own position in relation to the argument. You write stylishly and articulately, and explain your ideas well. You also gave a solid sense of a self-reflective position with regards to your understanding of yourself as an emergent artist with a specific agenda. Structurally the body of the essay was good, your argument flowed coherently and logically. Where you fell down considerably is in your failure to develop appropriate introduction and conclusion and your failure to use citations to back up, extent and further develop your own argument. Your introduction needs to map out the entire essay and not just the opening section as you do, and your conclusion needs to stand as a statement for your position in the argument itself, rather than as a sad add on at the end. This is such a shame as the main body of the text was excellent.
Bibliography is well laid out (such a shame you didn't use it).
Overall grade: 62%
I think maybe i should go crawl somewhere and die :(
As an extra note, one of her sentences didnt quite make sense... heh.
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Try to look on the positive side - you just needed some guidance on what was required. You will know for the next time and the overall grade wasn't too bad either, considering its your first time. Its obvious you have put a lot of effort into your work, as always.
Keep it up and the grades will improve!
Love you. xxx
I know exactly what they're talking about. Its a fairly simple matter of making the intro a "this is what im about to say" and then the conclusion "this is what has been said". I can give you my essay writing notes if you like. They cover this kinda thing. But yeah, weldone! You got some super marks there :)
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